Going Forward (Single off my LP) - Castle

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  1. Jaba
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    Jaba 2022!

    Jan 2, 2015
    Album Cover -

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    This is the first single off my LP coming out this year!



    Link -



    Credits -

    Lyrics: Myself

    Vocals: Myself

    Beat: Allarounda (Eedee showed me/gave me this beat, so thanks man!)

    Single Art: Myself



    Feedback is much appreciated!



    Lyrics -

    Intro -

    heyyo

    i don’t know

    if you’ve ever heard me or not

    but

    if not

    good

    cus that wasn’t me

    this is the real me

    Jacob

    welcome to my world (yo)



    Verse 1 (0:13 - 1:09 ) -

    Ive been searching everywhere to find my style

    every aisle, the bible, and vinyl but

    none of it worked, as i, was, still lost and felt as if

    i was still in a hostile environment

    no where to escape

    cemented in a prison!!!!!

    but what i was looking for was something different

    not relations or new religions

    i had already found all that

    and God, he helped me come to that

    a broad, tree he had gave me to pick from

    an MC, seemed to be the one for me

    and believe me i think that i made the right choice

    i sit here now with NO regrets,

    my spirit has been set free!

    and i am happy! to say that this is me!

    but to say i got here by myself would be a f---ing lie

    so shouts to patrico, eedee, and the pythwonder guys

    thank you so much for the little things you do

    eric, i hear your music and

    instantly learn from you

    patricio you give me some

    inspiring advice and python you

    were the first to believe in me,

    but apparently now i have let you down,

    so for now i solemnly swear that,

    from here on out

    you’ll never want to doubt me again

    ill prove you wrong

    to the point you’ll wish you never called me an annoying disappointment

    i swear that i am focused and

    this will be MY MOMENT!



    Chorus (1:09 - 1:36) -

    The past is gone and going forward is all i see

    positivity surrounds me and my conscience

    God, please help me through this and let me be me

    i hope my audience sees me as who i am really

    i will speak my beliefs with unreal confidence!

    the future is coming at an unbelievable speed

    where people come together, without any doubts

    and the amount of love, shall be blessed and LOUD!



    Verse 2 (1:36 - 2:30) -

    Music has been in my life! ever since I discovered it!

    hip hop has been in my life! ever since i uncovered it!

    And I knew from day one! I wanted to be apart of it!

    This s--- is dope as f---! I began to splatter everywhere

    and i don’t think anyone knew that i would began to tear

    this big of a ripple in the universe because of what i said or swore

    The more i put out, the more i wanted to tour

    the more i wanted to be adored

    but before i had any of that I figured out

    its not the fame and money, that i could go without

    it was about that boy scout that was going to commit suicide!

    that kids doubt in his life, was my way to thrive!

    my way to find inspiration and to keep going

    to help that one kid keep going

    meanwhile I’m zoning cus I’m doing what i want

    now I’m hungry, I’m starving,

    these situations are the things i hunt

    saving lives, stopping knives, oh but my life?



    what about my life?

    what do i still need to find

    How do i unwind and relax? cus its impossible

    with the state this world is in because if you

    can find a way then you’d have to be blind

    from all the sin BUT



    (Chorus)
     
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  2. CSW
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    Jan 2, 2015
    brainless with the ether
     
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  3. Charlie Work
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    Charlie Work Level 5 Goblin

    Jan 2, 2015
    Check out this artwork @JFK

    You are heavily influenced by the worst stretch of Em's career.
     
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  4. Jaba
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    Jaba 2022!

    Jan 2, 2015
    thanks for the feedback... if that is feedback and not just shots fired at me
     
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  5. CSW
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    Jan 2, 2015
    new smiley say:

    if you have haters you're probably doing something right
    :idk:

    keep it up

    edit: case in point... the following shiteating post I didn't even see
     
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    pluto✰ where the opioids?

    Jan 2, 2015
    was just about to say this :emoji_sob:
     
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  7. Charlie Work
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    Charlie Work Level 5 Goblin

    Jan 2, 2015
    I've probably dropped worse stuff than this. Just try to separate yourself from him. Draw influence from more than one guy. @Cinderella Man
     
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  8. MPURA
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    MPURA https://soundcloud.com/mpuramusic

    Jan 2, 2015
    not gonna lie, i cringed all the way through. you need to work on your flow - try to create your own instead of attempting Em's already bad current flow. work on your delivery too, you seem to unnecessarily over emphasise some words and it just sounds bad dude.
     
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    CODEiNE DEMON One foot stuck in the tarpit of my ways

    Jan 2, 2015
    I don't f--- with this AT ALL, and you should def take tips from these guys, BUT
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    CJ Poe The Dark Vegan

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    The cover matches the song..
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    naw, but for real man.. just keep at it..and get a better mic..and work on your flow.
     
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    Jan 4, 2015
    the laptop mic is reel hahahaha keep doin your s---
     
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    RetiredAccount Big Time Stuntin Like My Daddy

    Jan 4, 2015
    Work on flow, breath control, delivery, lisp, stuttering and invest in a better mic.
     
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  13. Jaba
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    Im not buying another Mic. I do this s--- for a hobby.
     
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    RetiredAccount Big Time Stuntin Like My Daddy

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    just giving tips don't get salty
     
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  15. Jaba
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    Jaba 2022!

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    im not. jus lettin u guys know.
     
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    MPURA https://soundcloud.com/mpuramusic

    Jan 6, 2015
    most people only do it for a hobby but with a better mic (and improvement with your rapping) comes better music which just makes it a more satisfying hobby
     
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    pluto✰ where the opioids?

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    at least step your engineering up my nig
     
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    Jan 6, 2015
    This was really good, could definitely see you as the next Eminem!
     
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