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I wrote some lyrics that have no flow can i have some opinions pls btw im only 15 so be nice..

Started by danurl, May 14, 2018, in Creative Add to Reading List

  1. Xdx
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    Xdx

    May 15, 2018
    A lot of cringe bars, spelling issues (but that doesn’t really matter), bad flow, issues with rhymes, and attempts to be edgy. It needs a lot of work. If you keep working at it you’ll get better, but you have to stop trying to be edgy.
     
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  2. aquaberryares
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    aquaberryares one time I made sex

    May 15, 2018
    I honestly feel like (beat plays with silence) u should give up on life asap
     
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    May 15, 2018
    lol 15 yaer old go build a tree house lmao am i right @Bourbon Ben
     
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    May 15, 2018
    The beat plays with silence was really f---ing with me. I was like how can the beat play and there be silence? Then I realized it must’ve just meant just the beat playing with no vocals.
     
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