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Eminem - These Demons REMIX

Started by FiveOh1, Mar 5, 2021, in Creative Add to Reading List

  1. FiveOh1
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    I feel like we’re not even listening to the same track.
    But I will take this advice and see
     
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  2. Antman
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    Dude you have to learn to take criticism lol. Ofc you’re going to hear different, ITS YOUR TRACK.
     
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    LasiK d-mn fine coffee

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    Yeah, you’ll always hear your own s--- as being the best. Once you learn to not, to see your own music objectively, you’ll be in a better place.

    Your flow is offbeat. There’s no arguing that. Your syllable count and rhyme patterns don’t match the BPM of the instrumental. Your sentences either end too early, or go too long.

    Rapping 101 is learning to flow on beat. It doesn’t matter if your lyrics are the best thing ever written, if you’re not rapping on beat you’re done.

    If you have trouble, try emulating other rappers flows. Pick a song you know, write to it using the exact same flow as the original artist, but change the words to your own. It’ll help you learn to stay on beat.

    the other option is to find the BPM of a beat and set a metronome to match it. Rap to the metronome.

    eventually, the more you practice, it comes naturally. But you have a lot of work to do.
     
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    Mar 6, 2021
    I am taking the criticism, hence the I’ll take this advice and use it
     
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    Mar 6, 2021
    When you say stuff like this it feels like you're only begrudgingly accepting the criticism and don't sound serious about actually using it. Cuz my opinion on this is the same as the last remix, you're trying to cram too many words in there so it sounds choppy and you go off beat. Your lyrics will never get the chance to resonate with people unless the rapping sounds good.
     
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    I don’t mean to sound begrudging, Normally when y’all say a track is off beat I will go back and listen to it over and over over and hear it and see it for myself, but for this track I have listened and listened and listened again and I just don’t hear it, I even sent it to other people and asked(which I actually always do anyway before releasing a track because I do have people that straight up tell me no that’s trash don’t put that out)
     
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    To be fair though I’ve never been able to tell myself if I was off beat or not up until only recently I’ve started being able to hear it some
     
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    1999

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    Bruh what are you talking about? Literally listen to the original song, you're just replicating Eminem's flow but managing to f--- it up in the process. You hit it towards the beginning and start spinning off when you start using longer syllables in the middle of the bars

     
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    Mar 6, 2021
    In his defense this IS an eminem song
     
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    1999

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    some of you are beyond help
     
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    This n----- needs Lil Baby wym
     
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    I f---ing love Lil Baby
     
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    I think he's ready for the drake stimmy tbh
     
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    Hmm. Honestly wasn’t even replicating Em’s flow intentionally. Probably just because I’ve listened to that song a lot and it’s one of my top from that album.
    I don’t know just when listening to it myself it sounds like I’m hitting the pockets to me. Sounds like I need to start a group pm here and add y’all to the list and start sending you guys tracks as I’m working on them. Lol that would get annoying though cause I be working on stuff like every day.
     
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    Probably. Also I understand that, but I think when remixing a song you should only ever remix it if you have something new to bring to the table or you think you could've made the song over the beat better. At least imo.
     
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    Is it possible to get a lil baby verse through the buyer
     
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    This is the best release I have heard from you. You sound much more confident and I can tell you are passionate about it. This don't seem forced as others you have put out and your flow is getting better. Nice work dude.
     
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