Oct 11, 2015 http://picosong.com/Sxiw/ LYRICS Verse 1 Today is a simple day Unlike the stuff I'm about to say Never call myself real Makes me feel faker than the fake Who said they had the Marshall Mathers Demo Tape Faker than wine without a grape I'm not fake, but no real either I hope you see how I feel from the Point of view that I reveal Ointment on my face So that I can acne erase Ain't a saint in this place Just another kid in the human race I try to act my age But sometimes, I feel like I'm tapped in a cage Just another struggle, not lacked in the page Of this book, called coming of age It's just something, pent up anger and rage Many emotions, happiness, especially sadness, too I'm getting colder each day Freezing like the ice age Told a girl she has a nice ace With no regret for what I say HOOK Verse 2 I guess I do need a change of mindstate The best I can say is that I find hate Why try to fit in and be dirty when I end up failing, I'm just not funny I should begin quitting, I'm smart But when it comes to social, I'm a dummy Now just how am I so bad? I asked a girl does she want to smash I told another girl if she wants the D I'd give it to her, and for free Now on the paper, I have a way with words But in the real world, this boy just can't get girls It's okay, in the end When you have electronic relaxation --------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------- Personally, I feel this is my best track yet. What you all think? Tell me what you liked, what you didn't like, what I should keep doing, and what I should improve on. -Rockstar
Oct 11, 2015 Well, at least you are being honest. Tell me, what don't you like about this song and how I could improve?
Oct 11, 2015 Yeah it's your best track to date. You are definitely improving. It's good/ok for your age. Keep it up as long as you like doing it . Maybe it will lead you to something or maybe not. You never know.
Oct 11, 2015 The worst: I asked a girl does she want to smash I told another girl if she wants the D I'd give it to her, and for free Cringe The best: Makes me feel faker than the fake Who said they had the Marshall Mathers Demo Tape Faker than wine without a grape or Now on the paper, I have a way with words But in the real world, this boy just can't get girls These lines were pretty on the same level. There was no line which was standing out.
Oct 11, 2015 Yeah, I actually did say those two things to girls... they were cringe inducing to me. For the best line I agree, I personally do think that was the best line I had wrotw.
