[ropes] 3-track project

Started by Narsh, Aug 14, 2015, in Creative Add to Reading List

  1. Narsh
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    Aug 14, 2015
    this is what i record with lmao
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    yes, thats a usb go mic attatched to a f---in' lamp lol

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  2. Pato v3
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    Pato v3 exilio

    Aug 14, 2015
    Sorry, just finished my nap
    First of all, thanks for the shoutout

    Second of all:

    :laff:

    Overall I liked the project. I can see the improvement lyrically speaking. I found the content of this tape bizarre but interesing. My fav track is Count on Hope.

    Suggestions:
    • I think sometimes on your rhymes you try to fit a lot of things in a pretty small fragment of time. This whole section from "sounds" for example:
    You're describing a lot of important stuff here but there is no description of the context or what's going on in general. I don't know if that was your intention but honestly I don't really enjoy it. Sometimes it feels like your lyrics are overcharged, but I'm not getting anything from the descriptions. Mainly "sounds" suffers this issue, I don't really see it in Tianjin or Count on Hope btw

    • Talking about "sounds", yeah I didn't really enjoy the song neither. Your flow is good but it has the problem above and I don't f--- with the beat.
    • I think you should add more wordplay to your tracks. Puns like the one I quoted are pretty dope haha, and they feel fresh after so many descriptions and contexts listed in your verses
    • Last but not less, imo since your first tracks you've improved a lot your songwritting abilities. Why don't make songs with actual hooks and better structure? I'll like to see what you can do.

    This was a dope project. But I want to see something bigger. Your potential is huge and I don't think you've something to prove with regard your rapping skills.

    Keep it up :mynig2:
     
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    Cyreides gfy

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  4. Narsh
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    really great feedback man i appreciate it...

    i definitely tried write more structured tracks this time around, even if it doesnt seem like it. Tianjin and Count on Hope both have obvious hooks...which i almost never do lol

    but just something about the way i work just has everything come out as a steady stream of ideas and s---...i need someone to work with to help me be more structured...which also applies to the rhyming stuff you brought up where it seems like im just overdoing it with no real purpose.

    if @Bleed and i ever start a project together, im sure it'll turn out a lot cleaner/bigger at the same time.

    give sounds another try when you have time, i know its a bit sloopy compared to the first track but i think it has a lot of cool parts (why am i gentle clown, i never knew & never wanted to find out, etc)

    thanks again tho man
     
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  5. Pato v3
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    Pato v3 exilio

    Aug 14, 2015
    No problem brother, I'm here to help

    Using your shoutout as my personal alarm btw
     
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  6. Narsh
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    did i pronounce it right doe
     
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  7. Pato v3
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    Pato v3 exilio

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    Yes! I was actually pretty surprised, ruining my chances to make fun of somebody's else pronounciation:lol6:
     
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  8. Narsh
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    this cover doe

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    Pato v3 exilio

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    @Skippy @M.I.C. @Smitty @Squid @FINESSING @Big Mitch @Akio @JCinator @BigCountry @Mike Tyson and the rest of the brodies should also check this out when they can
     
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  11. Narsh
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    anyone else hate this like @Luke :hehehe:
     
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  12. Cyreides
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    Can I just say how much better I like your music when you're not using that higher pitched thugger sounding voice/flow
     
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  13. Narsh
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    Yes you can, I appreciate the input :emoji_wink:

    I gotta try to control my voice a lot more I guess...its just so much more fun to rap in an exaggerated manner
     
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    more explosions in tianjin :emoji_slight_frown:

    Crazy
     
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    Come in the plug :emoji_heart:
     
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    Huh?
     
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    I thought u legit were saying u came in a plug
     
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    Future track names:

    1. African AIDs Epidemic
    2. I Can't Breathe (LOL)
    3. Hanging w/ Robin Williams
     
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    I'm too drunk for this s--- mayne
     
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