Mar 2, 2015

Killing MFers with words is easy,
leave um wheezy, queasy real un f---ing easy,
spitting freely killing nerds with herds of verbs,
like i give a turd, smoking herbs in the house of lords,
sounds obserred f--- it do u see me in forbes ?
people think im provoking can't they see im plainly joking?
why should i be reserved, im more disturbed a little absurd at least im not controlling,
rolling down a hill like a stone posing on my jack jones,
smothered in cologne, growling like im smack prone,
ahaa king of the throne b---- im home, ready to roam
condone sluts if they want my mick jagger bone,
ten hutt im in the zone, f--- writers block, i stomped you out,
command prompt, the demand slumped but i thumped the doubts,
like a fighter in a bout, flying uppercuts and crying sluts because there butt's look f-----,
im a rhyme inventor accordant to text, i need a publishing deal, b---- don't leave me vexed
thats what's on my wish list next.

 

Mar 2, 2015

 

Mar 2, 2015

Dont like it ?

 

Mar 2, 2015

the only thing i don't like is having to imagine the delivery

 

Mar 2, 2015

how long does something like that take to write?

 

Mar 2, 2015

This verse took about 25 mins, i can do a verse in ten mins but if i want it to come out good i prefer to take my time

 

Mar 2, 2015

Here's a blueprint to it, if u go over the yellow words with ur mouse and look at the blueprint info it will show u what it means

http://www.rappad.co/blueprints/140643

 

Mar 2, 2015

woah

this site man

 

Mar 2, 2015

It misses some rhyming words out though thats the only problem

 

Mar 2, 2015

That was terrible (srs), reminds me of the rhymes I wrote when i was 13. Im assuming you're a youngeN (17 n under)

 

Mar 2, 2015

Why was it terrible ? i been writing for just under 4 months now. So criticism is welcome.

 

Mar 2, 2015

You're just rhyming words for the sake of rhyming words. Sounds like you went on rhymezone.com and just put together some random s---. They have no relevance with each other and it all comes off amateurish and Incoherent

 

Mar 2, 2015

do u think this is better?

http://www.rappad.co/blueprints/117154

by the way wat the f--- is rhymezone ?
Post some s--- then n-----

 

Mar 2, 2015

Mick jagger bone

 

Mar 2, 2015

The p---- just used to fall on that mans d-ck lol

 

Mar 2, 2015

That site looks fukin gay. Lyrics are not a statistic thing it's for creativity

And why the fu- is it so hard to type your words correctly. What the fu- is ul and un. SMH

That was just as bad. Ton of irrelevant words put together very amateurish

Lol why are you tryna call me out? I'm rating you since you.made a thread, I didn't say I was better

 

Mar 2, 2015

im not trying to call u out dude.
ul-you'l, un-and, lazy i guess
irrelevant words plz show me these irrelevant words and i will explain why i put them there.

 

Mar 2, 2015

It's obvious that you used wheezy, queasy, and easy for no purpose other than forced multis.

 

Mar 2, 2015

Yh i did with those words yes