Aug 30, 2017

New song. Kind of experimental. Go easy

lemme describe this entire timeline
i thought she and i were in it side by side
till i found out she had five side guys
all in her mouth like five guys
wanted to call her out but turned a blind eye
yet when she told me i still died a little inside
i don't know why i tried to bide my time
and convince myself everything was fine
can't tell you how many nights i cried
till i decided to wipe my eyes
then cried some more when i realized
i was dryin em with the t-shirt we'd tie dyed
but to my surprise after all that i was still alive
i couldn't believe i had survived
so i did what was right
and high fived myself after tellin her bye-bye

later for my revenge, i went to r--- her
used a bicycle, a tricycle, some fried pickles, an icicle and and the white ranger
she said nice effort but try bigger
so i went and got a sky scraper, a buick lesabre
a unicycle, a motorcycle, a loaded rifle, plus five ------s and my right slipper
she said wow, i wish you were like this when i was with you
i said you were with everybody
and you wondered why my attention was spotty
now i've learned my lesson, got it?
i'm running from you and you'll never stop me
she said see if i care
next week i'll call and say i had a nightmare
and you'll be right there
sad thing was she was right, d---
and that s--- haunts me, i'm scared
but f--- it, the p----'s still tight so all's fair

as we reach chapter three
i got her crawling back to me
i'm kinda surprised actually
cuz since the other evening
we've been on the phone every night
awake at a quarter after three
on the phone till it runs out of battery
i don't know what my problem is
i'm all in again, i guess i can't resist her flattery
but all it is is a--- to me
then i kick her out of here, call me d-ck dastardly
but what she doesn't know
is that i do it out of fear
wait, what's that sound i hear
excuse me i gotta take this
what time you comin around my dear

 

Aug 30, 2017

Trash tbh Corey

 

Aug 30, 2017

do i know you

 

Aug 30, 2017

Perhaps

 

Aug 30, 2017

could you uh, refresh my memory

 

Sep 1, 2017

 

Sep 1, 2017

a couple things:
unless you're black, it's not really appropriate to use the n word

if this is a rap song I'm not sure if the flow syncs up rhythmically based on reading the lyrics and the syllable patterns

otherwise, do you. a good beat behind it and decent delivery it could sound ok.

 

Sep 1, 2017

thanks for the feedback man. yeah i’m gonna change that line if this ever gets recorded. i didn’t write this to a beat so that’s why that’s like that. yeah it’s meant to have a rap delivery, but like i said i haven’t actually tried recording it and it wasn’t written to a beat so yeah but thanks