I wrote some lyrics that have no flow can i have some opinions pls btw im only 15 so be nice..

Started by danurl, May 14, 2018, in Creative Add to Reading List

  1. danurl
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    danurl Daniel

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    RetiredAccount Big Time Stuntin Like My Daddy

    May 14, 2018
    15 year old rappers first time listening to odd future starter pack
     
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  3. danurl
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    danurl Daniel

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    lol pretty much homie but ive been writing before i started listening to them.
     
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    RetiredAccount Big Time Stuntin Like My Daddy

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    Don’t try to imitate them and you’ll get better at writing
     
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    pop

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    no smile unless im using vaseline :wayne:
     
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    Michael Myers Moderator

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    @danurl moved your thread to the creative section
     
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  7. joeyp363
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    Not bad. This would sound dope with an Eminen fast flow imo
     
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    FiveOh1 Fallout

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    Hard as f--- to read that s--- with it all running together.
     
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    danurl Daniel

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    in a good way or bad?
     
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    Probably in an emo way
     
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    reesey What You Looking At This For?

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    It's sad that you took that seriously
     
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    imma say scrap that and start over champ
     
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    danurl Daniel

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    what you mean start over its not bad yall just dont know the flow because its hard to put flow into notes
     
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  14. KanYeezy99
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    KanYeezy99 STICK AND MOVE THEN I SKRT SKRT SKRT

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    nah it's bad guy sorry those are bad lyrics. scrap & try again. best advice
     
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  15. mow
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    mow long live flippa

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    dont let the angst dictate what u wna do youre gonna regret it
     
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  16. danurl
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    danurl Daniel

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    thanks g lol i dont mean anything in my lyrics but i do at the same time ya know
     
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    Lil Squeed French Montana Stan

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    Yea these are too cringe my dude but I feel like I’d love it if peep made a song with these same bars
     
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  18. danurl
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    danurl Daniel

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    lul im glad lil peeps dead
     
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    KanYeezy99 STICK AND MOVE THEN I SKRT SKRT SKRT

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    wow you really are a confused 15 year old. go back to watching your youtube streams and forget this website exists. maybe also see a therapist.
     
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  20. mow
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    mow long live flippa

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    ur still gna be mad at urself for posting this
     
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