New song (ClockWork)

Started by Deadpool, Oct 11, 2015, in Creative Add to Reading List

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    Kenwashedup :lmaooo:
     
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    That beat is nice. Got put off though when you pronounced 'night'.
     
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    Oct 11, 2015
    Dayum Jax, I didn't know you rappin and singin.
    It's tight, I like it.
    :wow:
     
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    Nori ☺ Deadpool is my deformed bousin☺

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    I wanna see that c--- jerk, in my a---
    i wanna see it tickle, make me c-m
    I wanna see that c--- jerk, in my a---
    i wanna see it tickle, make me c-m
    i wanna see that d-ck c-m right away
    i wanna s--- that c--- all night and day
    i wanna s--- that d-ck at my own pace
    c-m on my face
    taste like frito lay
     
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    I like it, but try not to record when you've just woken up
     
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    I could see a chick pulling off the hook easily though.
     
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    :mjcamby:
     
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    Oct 11, 2015
    You could bring the drums out to the front of the mix a little more. They're buried behind everything.
    There's a little too much low end in your vox

    Otherwise this is pretty d--- good.
     
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    You saying he sound like a b----? :melo:
    Just giving it that Nori stimulus
     
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    It's weird to see your avy and these lyrics lol
    Horse c-m incoming
    :hard:
     
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    @Jax I thought the hook felt a bit too 'whiny'. Your vocal range ain't up to doing that style of hook.

    The hook fits with the beat it's just the deliverance.

    f--- you Nori I ain't gonna indulge in your games. :pac:
     
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    On the real though @Jax this is dope. I like it a lot, I like this better than you first few songs. Can't wait for your album to drop so I can buy it for the the picture and claim i got it for my sister :hovcry:
     
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    Agree with your first point. It's a step in the right direction.
     
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    "The girl of my dreams don't exist" :mjcry:
     
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    thanks for the feedback fam i still got alot to work on but thats why i go to school for it good looking out
     
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    @Mimi's sister was taken
     
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    Does your college do vocal classes or someshit?
     
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